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Comment on What’s In A Name??? by Sarah

Sarah — Fri, 19 Dec 2008 03:46:16 +0000

Ha… Wow you kind of read my mind on Names. I HATE my name soooo much. Ha… I guess I was right about my name being heck of boring, huh? Don’t trip though. Sarah is a terribly boring name. You should read my “What’s in a Name” because it basically says what you said about having an original name. Or I guess in my case, an un-original name. But I must say I don’t agree on you saying not to change your name because its you, because I REALLY want to change my name. Like very badly.

Comment on It tastes like home by Sarah

Sarah — Fri, 19 Dec 2008 03:39:17 +0000

Hi Anastassia!
I didn’t realize you were such a good writer. This story was very good and I felt like I was there. I know what you mean when you say it “tastes like home” and that “it’s a feeling you can’t describe”. I have those feelings a lot. But just like in passing. I will be doing something and out of the blue I see something random that reminds me of home. When I’m on vacation somewhere and I bring any blanket or sweatshirt, it will have one of my cats’ fur on it. I smell it and I smell my cat, Simon. It’s most definitely not a bad smell. It smells like home, like my cats, like my friends. It makes me homesick. So I kind of know what you mean. I also have that feeling when I have smores and it reminds me of where I used to live and all of my old friends that I love and miss so much. Anyway your writing is excellent and it’s a great story!

Comment on It tastes like home by Sarah!**

Sarah!** — Fri, 21 Nov 2008 01:34:44 +0000

O wow anastassia!!!This is totally good I loved it.My favorite part was when you said :”Cookies is equivalent to blank , My answer,Cookies is equivalent to home”.It was kind of fuuny and very cute at the same time.I can tell that you put a lot of thought into this story it and it worked out great!!In the begining i thought that you were just going off topic when you started saying… “My mother was quickly finishing baking her famous chocolate chip cookies.” but then after reading what your question was I suddenly understood it. Great job on this I love it!

Comment on Embarassing Family, Embarassed Me!!! by shannon

shannon — Thu, 09 Oct 2008 03:57:17 +0000

this is so funny im laughing as i read it, i could totally see you doing that.
i love the way you write it and use details like”rapidly playing.”
I love your opening sentance its really good.this is a really good story.
~shannon

Comment on What’s In A Name??? by kimberleighbms

kimberleighbms — Sat, 20 Sep 2008 04:24:58 +0000

anastassia i love your blog it so matches you

Comment on Embarassing Family, Embarassed Me!!! by Mr. Reed

Mr. Reed — Fri, 19 Sep 2008 05:30:08 +0000

I love this line in your intro: you just want to thrust your mortified face into a delicate pillow and scream at the top of your lungs. Ha. What a nice way to show not tell that feeling of embarrassment!! You also use “mortified” later.
I also liked the setting of the mall …
The birds, people, and homeless were all there, but something was missing. Maybe my confidence?
Nice use of the magic three.
Wonderfully told memoir! The “angry alarm” and the so-called stealing of the t-shirt make a great ending!!
Suggestions:
spelling: to or too? in “a little to much confidence.” Also, you need to edit for punctuation. You’re missing a few commas in a few sentences.
You might try to incorporate actual dialogue with your brother laughing at the end.

Comment on What’s In A Name??? by Mr. Reed

Mr. Reed — Fri, 19 Sep 2008 05:20:52 +0000

I like the sound of the name “Anastassia.” Believe it or not, I named my daughter from another student’s name I liked when I was student teaching: Tessara.
As far as your writing, I just have a few comments. First, I really enjoyed your whimsical voice. The intro is captivating. Your “kaboom” personality is a very unique way of describing yourself. I like how you have direct quotes in the beginning. You are also very organized. You begin with advantages and then shift to disadvantages. I especially like your transition sentence between the two body paragraphs: As any name comes with advantages it may also come with troublesome disadvantages.
Your conclusion is great as well, thought I would separate the three fragment phrases with commas instead of periods: It is a personality, a lifestyle, something that you just have to live with.
Keep up the good work.

Comment on What’s In A Name??? by zackbms

zackbms — Fri, 19 Sep 2008 01:52:16 +0000

I think that the first one was funny but the second one had spelling errors but it still was good

Comment on What’s In A Name??? by shannonbms

shannonbms — Tue, 02 Sep 2008 23:39:00 +0000

nothin..u?